After receiving feedback on my article, I can see several strengths and areas for improvements. A main strength is the informative mode of address, which communicates key information about the event. I also have employed an effective use of figures (such as the opening dates) in the opening paragraph that establishes context and engages the reader early on.
However, the feedback has also highlighted areas for improvement. The article would benefit from a clear headline, with the potential of a pun, to increase reader interest. Additionally, I could replace the quote from Exposed magazine (as they are my competitor) to one from the Sheffield City Council or an attendant of the market. This would improve the statements credibility and not promote my competitor. Finally, to make my audience active, it has been highlighted that I could round off my article with a competition for readers.
My next step is to focus on changing the articles quote to a more credible source, altering the ending to a competition (such as sending a photo of them eating their favourite snack to Steel City Scene's social media page) and adding a more engaging headline. These changes will improve the magazine's article and the audience’s interaction with the page.
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